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Ielts Graph Essay Sample Band 8 Ibm

In task 1 it is important that you accurately describe the information from the diagram so you don’t lose marks under Task Response. The difficulty is to decide what is the key information as there is often a lot of data to process. One way of thinking about this, is to ask yourself if someone could draw the chart and graph from the information in your report. This is not easy to do and so to help you, you will find below a 8 point checklist, an exercise and a practice suggestion.

Checklist

Here is my 8 point checklist to help you include the relevant details. I suggest you use it to check your own work: you should be able to answer “yes”to all the questions.

 

 

1. Type of diagram

Have you correctly identified whether it is a bar chart/line graph/pie chart/flow chart/table?

2. The correct tense

Have you correctly identified whether the data in the chart relates to past time, a current state of affairs or a future prediction? This includes not just using the correct tenses but also including specific times in your report.

3. The subjects

Have you included all the subjects that are referred to in the diagram? Even if you have a bar chart ortable naming 8 different countries for example, you still need to refer to them all in your report.

4. Units

Have you included references to the units? These may be units of time (months/years etc), money (millions of £) or simple numbers (10,000s). To do this, you need to read the x and y axes carefully.

5. Highs and lows/Beginnings and ends/Biggest and smallest

Have you included the extremes shown in the diagram? In nearly all charts and graphs these are key features to include as they give the reader a frame for understanding the chart or graph. When there is a lot of data, you may not include every extreme so you need to use your judgement.

6. Patterns and trends

Have you noted any patterns?

In dynamic charts (when there is a change in time), it is nearly always important to note whether the general trend is upwards or downwards.

In static charts (when there is only one time frame), it can be important to note patterns. For example, if you look at my sample report on holiday destinations, you will see that I group England, Scotland and Wales together and note that they have a similar pattern.

7. Exceptions

Is there anything in the chart that is completely different to the general pattern? If so, this too is very likely to be a key detail that needs to be noted.

8. Ordering information

Have you ordered the information in a logical way? It is no good putting all the right information in if the keys points are hidden away. This can happen if you follow the order of the chart without thinking. Possible logical ways of ordering the report include:

  • start with the most significant detail
  • start with the general pattern, then note exceptions
  • group items that are similar
  • move from the largest to the smallest
  • move from the first in time to the last in time

Exercise

The exercise is to look at this sample task 1 report and then try and draw it. Your version need not be exactly the same as the original but it should look very similar.

This bar graph shows the quarterly changes profits for Microsoft, Ford and IBM in 2012. The first point to note is that while both Microsoft and IBM are predicted to show a substantial growth in profits in this period, there is going to be little movement in the figures for Ford. It should also be remarked that although IBM will start the year with the lowest margin, it is predicted to be the most profitable company by the end of the year.

If we look at the numbers in detail, we see that Ford is expected to make a first-quarter profit of around $825 million and this should rise marginally to $900 million by the end of September, only to fall back to its starting point by December. In stark contrast, IBM is predicted to show a steady growth in profits throughout the year, shooting up from just over $180 million to exactly $1,200 million by the year’s end. After a difficult first quarter where its profits drop by around half to around $200, Microsoft is forecast to follow a similar pattern of steady growth from April to December, finishing at $600 million.

Download the task with answer and notes: Bar chart - US Companies profit forecast (4211)

Practice suggestion

The practice suggestion is quite simple. Look at one of your own reports and then try and draw the original graph/chart/table. If you cannot do it, go back to the diagram and see what you have left out.

 

 

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Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 53 - Percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Column Graph:

» You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» Write at least 150 words

  Percentage of participation of men in senior development positions

Sample Answer 1: 
The provided bar graph compares the number of male senior developers in three major software companies namely IBM, Microsoft and Apple between 1980 and 2010. As is presented in the graph, Initially Apple had the largest percentage of senior development employees but after 30 years IBM employed the largest percentage of such employees.

As is presented in the bar graph, initially in 1980, IBM had less than 3% senior male developers while Microsoft had 8% and Apple had about 15% such senior developers. After a decade, in 1990 to be exact, the percentage of senior male developers became almost the same for these companies. In 1995, the percentage of senior male employees in IBM became the highest and this kept on increasing till 2010. Finally, in 2010, IBM had the largest percentage of such employees making more than 60% while Microsoft had 45% and Apple had about 25% of such senior developers.

In summary, the number of male senior developers increased in all the three companies but the rate of increase in IBM and Microsoft were far higher than Apple. 

Model Answer 2:
The diagram outlines how the ratio of senior male developers increased between 1980 and 2010 in three tech companies, namely IBM, Microsoft and Apple. Overall, the senior male developers’ ratio in IBM increased remarkably despite its lowest percentage of such developers in early years.

As is presented in the bar chart, Apple had the highest ratio of males in senior development positions, roughly 15%, in 1980 whereas Microsoft employed nearly 7% such males in senior developer position. IBM, on the contrary, had only around 3% males in higher positions in the development sector, which was the lowest. After a decade, the ratio of such employees in these tech companies accounted for roughly 10-12%. Afterwards, the proportion of male developers in higher posts in IBM noticeably increased and in 2010 well over half of the employees in IBM were male developers. Apple, on the other hand, retained almost one-quarter of such employees while Microsoft’s male developers in leading positions went as high as 45% in 2010.

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